Dance Video Reviews

I am going to my first dance ever and I am completely lost when it comes to dancing. Does anyonw know any good dance how to videos or and good moves? Thanks, greatly appreciated.

Don’t Worry, most people think at dances everyone is like dancing with awesome moves.
but thats not true AT ALL. all my school dances people just stood there, or jumped up and down in crowds. Don’t worry (:
hopefully, it all works out for you!

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Reese methodically worked on her Algebra homework during homeroom. At the moment she was thinking about John. She and John were supposed to be studying for their test in about ten minutes. She anticipated every moment by looking at the clock. She couldn’t wait to get next to John. He was too irresistible for her to not think about him.
She stared at her pencil as she waited for Livingston to dismiss the students to go to their assigned study rooms. Right now she was squirming in her seat wanting to meet up with John.
"Hey," Demi said, placing her hand on her desk. "Holly told me to tell you to meet her by the cafeteria after homeroom."
"Okay, thanks," said Reese, looking up from her desk. "
"You wouldn’t believe what I heard," announced Demi. "Jude is getting these strange texts from this random girl saying how much she loves him."
"I know, I’ve heard!" replied Reese, laughing. "It’s so funny. The texts are like ‘Oh, Jude….I want to suck your dick.’"
Damien, Savannah, and Aaron snickered at Reese’s comment. Reese had a hard time not laughing at the ridiculous stories her friends came up with. People like Jude needed to be screwed with every once and a while. It was a random gag to pick on Jude. He was the most gullible person in the group.
"Okay, class," announced Livingston, pulling down the white screen for the video announcements. "Hand me your passes."
Reese swiftly got up out of her seat and walked over to her desk. She handed her the pink slip and waited for her to sign it. When she was done, Reese thanked her and took the slip from her hands.
On her way to the library, Jen stopped her halfway there.
"Have you seen Vincent?" Jen asked, her face tear-stained. "I need to talk to him."
"Jen, just get over it," groaned Reese. "It’s not the end of the world. You’re a beautiful girl. Any guy would want you."
"I don’t care." Jen shook her head. "I just want to talk to Vincent. He had no right to dump me right after the school dance."
Reese felt for her. She really did, but she was already dealing with a lot of problems. It was one thing for Savannah to nearly kill herself on Sunday, but now Jen was being dramatic. She didn’t known when the problems would end.
"Hey, I’ll talk to you later," promised Reese. "I have to study."
"Fine," sighed Jen. "I’ll just talk to Andy."
"You do that!" shouted Reese, darting down the hallway.
She made it to the library and clocked in with the girl manning the desk. Afterward she walked into the media lab and found John already reviewing his textbook.
"Hey," she waved, sitting in the chair next to him. "You ready?"
"Yeah," he grinned, putting an arm around her waist.
For a while they went over questions for their Spanish test. Even remembering lyrics from Spanish artists. When they were done they walked back to the library and sat on one of the couches.
"I think we’ll ace it," John said, putting his feet up on the table. "How ’bout you."
"Positive," responded Reese.
"You wanna hang out today?"
"Yeah, no doubt."
"What’s that I heard with Jude and text messaging."
"You gotta ask Demi." laughed Reese. "She knows everything."
With that, she leaned over and gave him a quick kiss on the lips. Ever since that night at Karyn’s party they had been inseparable. John even texted her every hour just to see if she was alright. She could get used to this.
During lunch she sat at the table with her girlfriends talking about the next party.
"How ’bout at Monica’s house?" suggested Courtney, glancing hopefully at Monica.
"We’ll see," Monica said noncommittally.
"Who’s coming?" asked Reese, chewing on a celery stick.
"Our friends," laughed Holly. "Duh."
"Sorry," Reese giggled, taking a sip through her straw.
"Do you think Carter and his new girlfriend are cute?" Monica asked, straightening her glasses on her face.
"Maybe," shrugged Courtney. "Nicole seems nice enough."
"Yeah," mentioned Reese. "And she’s pretty."
"I agree," said Holly. "Maybe not as pretty as Vanny, but—"
"No, Holly," said Reese. "Let’s not go there again. Vanny is doing alright."
"Well, if you say so," Holly said finally, biting into her chicken sandwich.
Reese was sure Savannah would be alright. Even though people were talking about the incident at the dance, she hadn’t shown any signs of weakness. And Reese admired her for that.
"Speaking of the devil…" joked Monica, pointing toward Savannah w

Prepare for my harsh nitpicks :
“At the moment she was thinking about John” – you don’t need to tell us this. You already show us she’s thinking about John in the next few sentences.
“She and John…she anticipated…she couldn’t wait..”- all she she she she. Why not change sentence structure?
Lol.
“She didn’t [know] when the problems would end”
““Hey[!]” She waved” – this is because waving is not about talking, so you can’t use a comma to separate it from the dialogue.
Same to “he grinned”. You can say: “”Yeah,” he said, grinning” but not the way you did in your story. Should replace the comma by a period.
Overall: I actually have mixed feelings about this piece. Whilst the plot is intriguing, the whole text is flooded with dialogue with hardly any more descriptions. This is called “tell not show”. Perhaps you shouldn’t be pushing actions on too much, but give us insights about how your characters feel etc. Make sense?

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